Preview of a Story about Taelia

[Affa]

Here's the first paragraph of the fanfic I'm working on that fully explains the past of Taelia, I'll be translating the whole thing into french for a contest.

Hello,
I'm Taelia...yes, that Taelia, the one who was at Kadic for one day,
and then left. I'm the one that looks like Aelita, and I'm here to
tell you that is no coincidence. I am not, as some of you may think,
the daughter of Anthea, that she had after she escaped from the Men
in Black and remarried. As far as I know Anthea is dead, I never
heard from her after she was captured. I am not, in fact, related to
Aelita in any way. My hair isn't even naturally pink, it's black.
Now...I'm going to tell you a story, my story...But, I warn you, do
not repeat this to anyone. You hear me? No one. You never know when
your enemies may be around...The walls have ears, you know. If the
Men in Black hear you know of me, they'll chase you down and get the
answers out of you by any means necessary. I'm so sorry if what I'm
doing will put you in the line of fire...but, I need to tell someone.
I need at least one person out there to know that I existed...and to
know what I've done. Please, don't hate me once you hear my story, or
go ahead and hate me, it's not like I'm not used to it. Besides,
after I finish this story I'll be gone. I can't stay in one place for
long or the Men in Black will catch me...but I'm getting ahead of
myself. I suppose I should start with my early childhood...

[Soul Jelly]

I'm gonna move this over into Peer Review, since I guess you're asking for people's thoughts so far. ^^

[Affa]

I am, thanks xD

[Stella Luce 333]

This is really good! It reminds me of how James Patterson started his Maximum Ride series…

[Affa]

Thanks, I never actually read that series though xD

[aelitaxwilliam]

It sounds interesting. I have to admit, normally, I don't like inner monologue-ish introductions, but I've seen it done well, and this is one of those times! I like the "walls have ears" comment especially. And I was always interested about what happened with Taelia...she looked to much like Aelita to be a coincidence. :p

I'm excited to see the rest!

[Affa]

Thanks, I'm currently 7 pages into it xD

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